A poem by an untalented person

Lemme know what you think, be as frank as possible, i won't get shocked, pinky promise !!! haha

I wrote that a year ago

Never can forget my greatest memory
One don't forget a day like this
Under the blue sky everyday
Roses remind me, So I kiss

Once upon a time I was young
Didn't have to worry about a thing
I had a dream about a song
When woke up, I couldn't sin'

actually it's made of 12 Pieces, 4 lines each, but I thought the beginning is enough just for the sake of it,
Notice the first letter of each sentence in the first piece make a word, which i thought was pretty cool

Thanks
Lee

its very gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooood dont say you are untalented i wish i can write like you